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You come to me when my heart feels the ache,
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I wish you could just leave me if I pray.
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When you drip down, my nose will start to shake,
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The reason that my eye swells during day.
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Why do you love me when I see my grade?
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You take a free ride when I see no light.
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Why do you rush through my cheek when I'm graved?
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It feels like you just left my heart a bite.
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Yet, I love you with all my heart and mind.
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As you are inspiration for my blog.
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Between us there's a Best-Friend Contract signed,
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Our friendship never fade nor ever clog.
u / u / u / u / u /
Feel free to join me when I start complain,
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I'll drink more water, come and share my pain!
I used personification in this sonnet, can you guess what it is?
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Before I read the 10th line, I really thought that you're writing your sonnet with one syllable words only, haha. But I don't really get what your topic is. However, you follow the rhyme scheme and iambic pentameter rule very well, and there's a clear sentence showing that you turn the hate into the love.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, your colorful sonnet caught my attention. (good job!)
ReplyDeleteI noticed you paced stressed sound at the end of "shake" but I think the order should be opposite. -->so this means, shake=stressed, unstressed
Also, remember to put [A][B] at the end of each sentence:);)
I can read your sonnet with rhythm and It's really fun to read it. I enjoyed it a lot!!
So nice!! You have a strong and touch describe about your hate and love. I want to know that is your topic talking about "rain"? Cause you say that "You come to me when my heart feels the ache" and this is how I feel when during the sad mood I hope it will rain so that can fit my feeling. I think your sentences are so beautiful. Plus, I love your picture, too.
ReplyDeleteYour sonnet is awesome, like I told you before. It tears right! Your 4th line gave away, 'The reason that my eye swells during day.' You made it awesome that I never thought that tears are best friends to us, I just find them annoying. :P But I don't get this line though, I'll drink more water, come and share my pain!''
ReplyDeleteI love your sonnet !!!!! It's soooo romantic ! But some of them are too deep and I don't think most of the people would understand it! Try to make it easier to read ! Master lee! Lol
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